I rarely do these things, but this one caught my attention:

Writing Prompt #381 Charisma Does Not Equal Good: Writing Prompt: Write a story, scene or poem about an evil charismatic leader.

So, here is my scene:

A wave of malevolent energy crashed through her, causing her breath to catch. Someone isn’t happy about my presence. She worried her bottom lip with her teeth and scanned the crowd. So many strange faces. Her skin prickled and her muscles tensed as a dark stare drew her attention over to a tall man with a militant hair cut standing by furthest table.

His intense blue gaze settled on her and he saluted her with his glass, flashing her a white smile. His face was that of a boy, rather relaxed, as if nothing worried him, yet the vibes she got from him told her he was more than alert to his surroundings.

“Who is that guy?” Her head inclined towards the stranger.

Her companion spun them around and glanced in the man’s direction. “He’s one of father’s… peers.”

She frowned. Why does he stare at me so intently? She fought the urge to shiver. The air of malice had dissipated, but her stomach knotted. She didn’t know how to describe it, but something told her he would be lethal in battle. Perhaps it was the way his shoulders looked tense, as if prepared for battle, or his casual interactions with the crowd? All she knew was she didn’t want to be alone with him. No matter how cute, or charming he appeared.

“Don’t worry. He doesn’t bite, much.” The hint of humor in her companion’s voice relaxed her. If he wasn’t worried about the stranger, then she wouldn’t either.Β Could be my imagination playing tricks on me.Β She shrugged it off as she and her companion continued dancing.

Not bad for five minutes of writing.

How did I do? Do you think it’s too obvious that the stranger is evil? Should I focus more on his appeal?

Do you ever participate in writing prompts? What kinds of exercises do you do for free writing, to shake the cobwebs before you sit to work on your manuscripts?


About kittyb78

Catrina Barton is a licensed Kung-Fu Instructor of the Black Dragon style, and draws on that experience to make her fight scenes both realistic and action packed. She enjoys being surrounded by the stark beauty of mother nature. Whether it's a moon-lit starry sky, or a picnic by a peaceful waterfall cascading from the mountain side. Growing up no matter where she was physically, she always had at least one book in her hands and spent every free moment lost in a book. It's only natural that as she grew up, her passion for reading grew into an even stronger passion for writing, especially Young Adult Paranormal Romances. She is a proud member of many writing and marketing groups, and an active participant at Critique Circle and several other crit groups. Favorite personal quote: "An author cannot grow without both constructive criticism and encouragement."

3 responses »

  1. This is fantastic! I love how you brought the senses alive with the prickled skin and the stomach knotted. How did you feel writing it? That is the best way to judge a piece πŸ™‚

    I post prompts on my blog on Friday’s. You are welcome to check them out if you are interested πŸ™‚ I love prompts, they take you places you may never plan on going.

    • kittyb78 says:

      Hello Maryellen, thanks for stopping by and commenting. I’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚
      As I stated in the post I usually don’t do writing prompts, but this one stood out to me. Mainly cause I’m a sucker for the bad boy archetype. πŸ™‚
      But, I might look into doing more. For five minutes it wasn’t so bad.
      Feel free to stop by any time. πŸ™‚

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